The writings below represent short essays written by your classmates. The writing prompt was, "How has the abundance of oil in Southwest Asia affected life in the region?" Please critique the following brief paragraphs by explaining what is correct or incorrect about each one in a comment
1. The abundance of oil in SW Asia has affected the region greatly. It's region has gotten more trade from different countries. The water is very scarce so they have to learn to trade and share with other countries. The amount of oil has greatly affected SWA sia with trade.
2. The abundance of oil in SW Asia has helped them develope and modernize faster. SW Asia have build more hospitals and schools due to the sell of oil in the region. The sell of oil has helped the region by modernizing their daily life.
3. The abundance of oil effected the life in the Southwest Asia Region posotively. SW Asia has a good abundance of oil in their region. The abundance has effected the living, and has improved it. The abundance of oil in SW Asia has improved the region and made a good impact on living.
4. Asia has really taken advantage of their large oil supply Asia can use it for themselves Asia can ship it to other countries Many people would be unemployed if not for it
5. The abundance of oil has improved the Standard of living. People used to live and work in small farms to survive. The increase of oil has brought more money and allowed people to have easier lives.
6. The abundance of oil in Southwest Asia has had both posative and negative affects on life in the Region. Posative because of the cash profit from other countries wanting their oil. But also negative due to wars fought over the oil. The price of oil today has increased therefore Southwest Asia is making profit.
7. The abundance of oil in Southwest Asia has made this area gain a lot of money. The money has been used to help lessen the problem of freshwater. Money has also made this area more modernized. Southwest Asia has changed a lot due to gaining money from oil.
8. As oil in Southwest Asia Prices gos up. It affects the ones who buy it. The United States buys most inf not all the oil from them so it ther prices go up USA would go up too. The Gas Prices need to go dow or make a solution
9. The abundance of oil made other countries rely on Southwest Asia (SW Asia) to import their oil to them. Many countries live in locations that mainly has water, plants, and animals rather than places that has oil. SW Asia has mostly a non renewable area thus making trade difficult. So in conclusion the oil SW Asia has affected their lifestyle by making other countries rely on them all the time.
10. The abundance of oil had dramatically affected life in the Southwest Asia region. It has increased the Standard of living dramatically. With the exports and price of gasoline, the OPEC receives a positive outcome. Therefare, the abundance of oil has greatly affectes life in the Southwest Asia region.
